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Computers are an essential feature of modern education. Some people believe that certain subjects, such as mathematics, are better taught using computers. Others, however, think that there are aspects of education in which computer use is inadequate. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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The use of computer has made education easier for
this
 generation. Mathematics
for instance
 is a dreaded aspect of science;
this
 has
however
 been simplified by the advent of computer applications.
Also
, mathematical the time it takes to complete mathematical functions has been reduced significantly.
On the contrary
, students have become lazy
as a result
 of computers. A number of mathematical solutions which should have been easily derived are now being done via computing.
In addition
, some calculations
can not
can not
cannot
 be derived with the use of computers. The performance of most students in
this
 aspect
have been
Suggestion
has been
had been
 poor as
this
do not involve
Suggestion
does not involve
 computers. In conclusion, I believe that computers have enhanced the study of mathematics; students should be able to utilize their time to solve problems relating to the areas where computing
can not
can not
cannot
 be easily achieved.

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