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Some people think that the government should invest more money in teaching science than other subjects to make progress. Do you agree or disagree?

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Science has played a significant role
for
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in
 any
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country
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country's
 development and growth.
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, it has influenced a group in society who believes that focusing and investing
excess amount
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the excess amount
an excess amount
excess amounts
by
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of
government
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 in teaching science will give more promising results and will be more progressive for everyone in the future. I certainly don’t agree with
this
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 point and will share more positive insights on other necessary skills. Every nation has immense importance of science as it’s enhancing the capabilities in all working area due to which it has become a
best
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good
 choice of subject for major individuals be it for student, teacher or
government
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. But there are other subjects like math, account, history,
english
an Indo-European language belonging to the West Germanic branch; the official language of Britain and the United States and most of the commonwealth countries
English
 and many more who
has
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have
 their own importance which gives the bright future to everyone within the society and
country
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 as well. Today,
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government
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the government
 is
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 taking all decisions prudently and have the understanding that a
country
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 cannot survive by devoting the more money and time only on one subject. Even in the school or college, major volume of the students will be found other than science subjects. So to have more investment in a particular subject can
demotivate
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 to other subjects candidates and which can lead to a failure of the system.
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, it is necessary to have the parity and motivate to everyone so that in the society no conflicts happens between two subjects. To sum up, every
government
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 is liable to make every individual strong be it from any field as it will make
strong
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a strong country
country
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 with strong hand with no discrimination.

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