In some countries people who visit art galleries are reducing what are the reason for this. How can this problem be solved.

Initially
, I strongly believe that sport is very important of
maters
a vaguely specified concern
matters
which of them, not only can keep healthy society but
also
they can help to
rise
raise the level or amount of something
raise
youth better than
past
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the past
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
let you know more about me and how
i
refers to the speaker or writer
I
think about
this
subggect
the subject matter of a conversation or discussion
subject
.
Increasing number
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An increasing number
Increasing numbers
The increasing number
of sport facilities are the easy path for the
gavernmet
the organization that is the governing authority of a political unit
government
for keeping both
health
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healthy
and safe their
society but
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society, but
the govern have to look
to
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for
another
not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied
other
opinions. At
first
, I want to see
first
point of view about
incearsing
becoming greater or larger
increasing
sport
facililities
a building or place that provides a particular service or is used for a particular industry
facilities
are enough. I think that they are as parents or adults who have
responsiblity
the social force that binds you to the courses of action demanded by that force
responsibility
in the their family, have many
concern
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concerns
about their youth member in the own self family. They believe that by increasing safe area which young people can spend more their time in there, it can
be helping
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be, helping
them to decrease of attending in the worse friends gathering.
On the other hand
,
second
group
believe
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believes
that
this
motive is not adequate for making
health society
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health, society
becouse
for the reason that; on account of
because
they think about those
place
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places
whithout
in absence of
without
concedering
deem to be
considering
young
peolpe
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person
people
person's
needs which are not
usefull
being of use or service
useful
and they say before of any moving and thinking about the problem, it is better to significant to
haighest
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the highest
highest
required by young people.
to
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To
concloud
decide by reasoning; draw or come to a conclusion
conclude
, I have a same idea about
neccessary
absolutely essential
necessary
about measuring all of the
peroblasms
a state of difficulty that needs to be resolved
problems
,
lacks
tell anonymously
leaks
or needs
that is
why the results can help us to both make a
best
Suggestion
better
good
way and
dession
make or work out a plan for; devise
design
.
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