Some people believe that it is essential to include Physical Education classes in the curriculum for all school-age children. Others think that children's time is better spent on more academic subjects. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Adding, physical education classes in the curriculum for juniors to seniors are more beneficial in the view of half of the mortals
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while some deem that to putting
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the focus
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associated with academia or an academy
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subjects including science to art are more advantageous
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I will discuss both with some justification. Physical education
classes including
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classes, including
both practical as well as theoretical part which helps juveniles to properly
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keep or maintain in unaltered condition; cause to remain or last
preserve
perceive
the concept of sports
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yoga and health
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a customary way of operation or behavior
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analysis, it’s
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gloves of other subject which are equally indispensable to former one to commencing with science is the most crucial academic subject in the field of technology and
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innovation, which
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the nation
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the cure
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skills, enhance
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the nation
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The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • In conclusion
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