The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the number of men and women in further education in

Britain in three periods and whether they were studying fulltime or part-time. 

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and

make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates
amount
thousands
of Britain
student
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students
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in
further
education that based on gender and
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the
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kinds
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kind
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of
fulltime
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or
part
-
time
studying between
in
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1970 and 1990. The
amount
of
part
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part-time
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time
student
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students
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significantly
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is significantly
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bigger than full
time
. The trend of female
student
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students
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increased either in
full
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full-time
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time
or
part
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part-time
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time
education, so on
full
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full-time
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time
male
student
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students
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,
while
amount
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the amount
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of
part
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part-time
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time
student
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students
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fluctuatively
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lucratively
and
trend
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the trend
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to decrease
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decreased
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from the first
period
. The highest
amount
of
part
-
time
male
student
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students
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happened in
a
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the
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period
1970/1971 around 1000
thousands
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thousand
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,
while
female
student
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students
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happened in
a
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the
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period
1990/1991 around 1100
thousands
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thousand
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.
On the other hand
, the highest
full-
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number of full-time
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time
student
reached above 200
thousands
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thousand
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in
a
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the
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period
1990/1991 either
in
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male
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males
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or
female
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females
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. Around 150
thousands
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thousand
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part
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part-time
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time
male
student
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students
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downward in
second
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the second
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period
and upward again in
third
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period
. In Britain,
part
-
time
had
much
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more
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students than
full
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full-time
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time
education and there was
the
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a
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rise
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rising
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amount
of female
student
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students
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Vocabulary: Replace the words amount, thousands, student, part, time, period with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 5 times.
Vocabulary: The word "trend" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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