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The 21st century has begun. What changes do you think this new century will bring? Use examples and details in your answer.

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Even today in some places parents take decision for their children; especially, what subject they have to
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 in their higher classes. Some argue that it must be science related subjects rather than art, as it ensures better career opportunities. In my opinion, I think
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 should be based on students’ preference. Obviously, there are many reasons why children are the right person to take the decision of their career.
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, Students have their own interest in various subjects, even though
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 may be entirely different from their parents' viewpoint.
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 interest motivates them to
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 hard and achieve great success in their life.
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, many successful people they followed their dreams, if their parent made them
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 subjects according to parents’ interest, they would not be able to become successful.
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, it is vital that children be allowed to select courses based on students' point of view. Just because parents have selected subjects
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 they are
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 students to pursue the career they want to become. In other,
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 sometimes kills either future cricketer or a singer, which would be
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a great loss
 for the society. A recent
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 has shown that children who forced enrol science related subjects often perform badly compared to one who selected
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 based on own wish.
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