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Most artists earn low salaries and should therefore receive funding from the government in order for them to continue with their work. To what extent do you agree?

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Some people think most
artist
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 earns very low salary and
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 they should receive funding form, the
government
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 in order to continue their
work
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. I strongly disagree with the statement as most of the
artist
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 get help from nonprofit organization and
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 technological development has led to recognition of
artist
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 and their
work
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 on the global scale. When a person has talent he is recognized and rewarded the same way creative people are being recognized by multinational companies who wants to keep the
art
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 and culture growing. There are any companies who not only support but
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 provides job opportunities to many talented artists.
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, a global
art
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 company in the UK recognize and help
artist
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 to develop their
artwork
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 in innovative areas and
also
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 fund them. They not alone fund
,
Accept space
,
but
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 market the
work
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 globally.
This
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 way the
artist
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 does not need
government
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 funding to sustain themselves. Now a days
artist
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 has started getting global recognition due to the development of technology. The use of visual media and other latest technology help the
artist
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 to make new innovation in their
artwork
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 and
also
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 sell their piece of
art
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 through video conferring without any difficulty. If a piece of
artwork
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 is interesting
with
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to
,
Accept space
,
people from across the world appreciate and get the
artwork
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. Finical dealing is done
wit
expresses the means used
with
 people across the globe the
artist
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 not only earns in Indian currency but
also
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 in foreign currency. These days, people’s love for abstract paintings and sculptures are on the rise and they can be sold to anyone by simply video conferencing
with
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to
 the customer anywhere.
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, as artists are earning in different currencies it is not necessary for the
government
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 to fund them anymore. To conclude, there is no need for the
government
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 to support the artists financially any longer because there are many
art
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 loving organizations that
willingly
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will
 support them. At the same time, due to worldwide marketing they have started being recognized by many people and
hence
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 it is easier for them to sell their
work
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.

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