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Some people think that the best way to improve road safety is by reducing the maximum speed limits on vehicles, others think there are other better ways. Discuss both sides and give your opinion.

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It is thought by some people that the most excellent mode of improving
road
safety
 is by decreasing the maximum speed limits on vehicles while others think there are better ways. In my opinion, I consider public enlightenment on the rules guiding
road
safety
 a better way in achieving
this
. On the one hand, while some people think that reducing maximum speed limits on vehicles is a major way in achieving sanity on our roads, I agree with
this
 as it will curb the speed of some drivers and
as a result
, accidents will be greatly reduced.
However
, it should be noted that a recent study
by
Suggestion
of
 federal
road
safety
 has shown that only 30 percent of accidents are caused by drivers driving at high speed
hence
 other factors that causes
such
 should be looked into.
On the other hand
, factors
such
 as making phone calls while driving and watching television are major
distractors
mental turmoil
distractions
detractors
 and
hence
 can serious accidents on the roads.
Hence
, the need for the government to create awareness through different social platforms
on
Suggestion
of
 the factors that causes accidents and how to curb
such
.
For instance
, I remember a neighbours son who died a few years ago
as a result
 of watching his
favorite
something regarded with special favor or liking
favourite
 movie while driving to work, he was so carried away that he didn't see the oncoming trailer that lost his break before the head on collision. It was really pathetic as it could have been avoided. In conclusion,
although
 reduction in maximum speed limits in vehicles can improve
road
safety
. There are other causes,
such
as watching of
Suggestion
as watching
 television and making phone calls.
As a result
,
this
 should
also
 be taken into recognition and the public should be enlightened on how to avert
such
.
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