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Digital Digital communication technology, such as email, instant messaging and social media, has improved communication and connection between people. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

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It is
belived
accept as true; take to be true
believed
 that,
communication
technology
for example
, short messaging services, email and social media has improved the connection between people on
large scale
Suggestion
a large scale
. I agree with that
communication
 has been
greatest source
Suggestion
the greatest source
 of change from past 20 years.
Firstly
, the facilities provided by
communication
technology
 has improved the human lives by reducing the long distances to short distance. The use of
internet
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the internet
,
Accept space
,
 and cellular
communication
 has given
humans edge
Suggestion
a human edge
human edge
 to do long hour work in
little fraction
Suggestion
a little fraction
 of
time
Suggestion
the time
.
for
Suggestion
For
 example, with the help of internet one can buy clothes online and get them at doorstep in short time. Henceforth the digital
technology
 is making lives easier than before by reducing the long paths into short paths.
Secondly
, digital
communication
 has made a big impact on human behaviour as many people intermingle with different types of cultures and their values. The
usage
Suggestion
use
 of social media has made humans to share their culture with others. As the people learn more and more about
others they
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others, they
 try to change
theirself
Suggestion
their self
,
Accept space
,
 and their cultural understanding.
For instance
, In
sindh
Suggestion
Sindh
 people got to know about their cultural value with the help of social media and television which has now made
big influence
Suggestion
the biggest influence
biggest influence
 in their lives. So it is worth that
communication
technology
 has changed the life style of people's around the world. In conclusion, I would say that connection between people has been greatly improved by the use of various types of technologies like social media, cellular technologies, and usage of emails.

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