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A government has a responsibility to its citizens to ensure their safety. Therefore, some people think that the government should increase spending on defence but spend less on social benefits. To what extent do you agree?

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Safety is the primary concern for the people, so that they can run their life peacefully I agree to partially the government is always concern about the citizens of the country to make sure their safety and funding for the
defence
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 according to the current world political situations. Apparently the funding is based out the infrastructure which is really good and it can be reduced automatically in their budget as they can use it for quick transport of weapons as fast as possible.To improve the
defence
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, the government has to spend more on a development project for people and meanwhile invest in
defence
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 system would be always preferable options to proceed.

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