Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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integral part of human beings to move towards a successful career

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while some reckon that the results of getting

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a job

after school are the elite option which is illogical from my point of view

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however

I describe some positive for both opinions

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To commence with, the method of degree which is the

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mere

proof of the qualification of the scholars which are committed by

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institutions

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a doctor can become an expert doctor and get

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hospitals and take participate in experimentation on different organisms with the help of university knowledge

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Furthermore

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a British abbreviation of 'university'; usually refers to Oxford University or Cambridge University

varsities

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provide professional experience of every field either it is related to engineering or space exploration

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Universities are the only way to get a highly satisfied job which was proofed in recent survey which was conducted by

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the statistics centre

in California

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a job

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29Grammar mistakes
 

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Lexical resource: 4.0

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Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Topic Vocabulary:

Academic qualifications
Specialized skills
In-depth knowledge
Personal growth
Social development
Practical experience
Financial independence
Career progression
Professional networking
Education
Work experience
Successful career
Personal interests
Career goals
Decision-making process

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Some people believe that studying at university or college is the best route to a successful career, while others believe that it is better to get a job straight after school. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of helth and fitness are decreasing. What do you think are the causes of these problems and what measures could be taken to solve them?

Some people believe that only employees who have worked at a company for a long time deserve to be promoted to a higher position. What is your opinion about this?

In the future, people may nolonger be able to pay for things in shops using cash. All payments may have to be made by card or using phones. Do you think this will happen one day? why do you think some people might not be happy using cash?

University students nowadays have too much freedom and do not study enough. To what extent do you agree and disagree? Explain your opinion, using specific reasons and examples.