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Nowadays, international tourism is the biggest industry in the world. Unfortunately, international tourism creates tension rather than understanding between people from different cultures. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

#tourism #industry #world #tension #people #cultures
Planning: Topic: International Tourism Keyword: Biggest Industry, in the world, tension, Unserstanding,
people
 and culture. What: Travelling from one country to another, Lost of
currency
, Philippines, South-east asia countires economy totally depend on tourists. Spying as a tourist, no knowing the cultural differences, Violence at night party. Drug. Who:
People
 from rich countries have more backpackers. How: Earn
currency
, money flows, Suspicions about other country
people
, take advantages of the tourist and kill them for money. When: When have time, money and willingness, Study break, For research, Where: sea beaches, Montain, Historical places, Museum, why: To lessen bordemon, Make strong bonding, Know the planet earth. Vocabulary: Backpackers, Foreign
Currency
, Picturesque place, view, planet earth, tourism industires, Tourist. voilence, drug, murder, Night life and drinking, airplane, Scuba diving. Rock climbing. Soical bonding, Creates good human: Structure: P1: Topic Sen: Country development by earning lots of foreign
currency
 Expanantion: South-East asian countries and 1/2 of world'd counries first three major finiancial source is Forign backpakers. Example: The Philippines, Indonesia.... Concession: Some countries may not be suitable for foreigners because of the social standart
for example
 india and the tendency of raping P2: Create a strong bonding in human race and help reduce trace and anxiety Exp: Remove bordemon and make strong human by otherstanding other nations culture. help to judge other
people
 easity. Example: Study shows
People
 who travels a have more knowledge about.... Concession: Some young
people
 involve on drung and more keep to join night party which could be a dangerous ......
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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