Some people think that men are more competitive than women. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Few decades

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A few decades

ago, in most of the

countries

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country

men were dominating in all industries

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as government administration, business leaders and space research sectors.

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, at present women are occupying top roles in various organizations, on the other side, some people assume men are more competitive than women. In my opinion, I strongly disagree

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with

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thought, women perform extremely well in professional and educational exams when compare to men.

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, of late women are occupying top roles in various government and private companies, which shows they outperform men in many aspects.

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, every year when

government

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the government

declare

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declares

public exam results, women attain top 3 positions

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compare to men.

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, the recently concluded all India Chartered

exams

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exam

results show that top 5 ranks are attained by women, which signifies that they more competitive than men. Most importantly, patience is the key in the competitive world, where women possess more patience than men, which help them to take

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wise decisions

a wise decision

during crucial situations.

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have never

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given

up attitude which helps them to work hard to reach the goals.

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, balancing personal and professional life

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key for any working professionals. Many researchers suggest men are not capable in managing life than women.

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, current defence minister MRS. Nirmal Seetharaman does

fantastic job

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a fantastic job

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with

assigned responsibilities, where many important leaders have appreciated her

decisioning

the act of making up your mind about something

decision

skill during conflicts with neighbouring countries.

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, women perform smart work when

compare

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compared

to men, which help them complete the assigned duties more efficiently than men. Late chief minister, Miss Jayalalitha considered to be as

iron lady

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the iron lady

for her administrating capabilities.

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, it has been assumed based on the above facts, women are more competitive than men in every aspect. In conclusion, mental endurance and relentless hard work are key attributes of

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a competitive nature

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skills in their duties for these reasons, I certainly believe women are more competitive than men.

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Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

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Clear and correct grammar

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