It is currently believed that children's behaviour and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

I disagree that the lack of strict discipline or/and
punishiment
the act of punishing
punishment
is the result of children's misconduct. It's necessary to understand that the
way
that a kid behave is much more complex than just punishing them for something that they did.
First we
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First, we
need to look to the parents, how they construct one idea of respect with each other. If a
child
grow
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grows
seeing that their parents always find the solution for their problems by fighting the kid will understand that
this
is the right
way
that she need to behave to solve problems. Is necessary that the parents show patience, care and control of the situation and pass it to the
child
.
Second
, some kids have
more difficult
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more difficulty
more difficulties
to socialize, which reflects in the
way
that the other kids will look
to
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for
at
them and possibly result in bullying. That
way
the
child
will close herself even more and
possible
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possibly
act with angry feelings towards their school friends and parents. Unfortunately, there aren't recipes of
sucess
an event that accomplishes its intended purpose
success
sauces
to create a
child
. It is necessary to have patience and always listen to their feelings, because they are human
too and
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too, and
are dealing with a million
toughts
the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about
thoughts
per
second
.
This
is why I disagree that a children's behaviour is the result of lack of discipline.

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