It is currently believed that children's behaviour and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#children #behaviour #misconduct #lack #discipline #punishment #parents

I disagree that the lack of strict discipline or/and

punishiment

the act of punishing

punishment

is the result of children's misconduct. It's necessary to understand that the

way

that a kid behave is much more complex than just punishing them for something that they did.

First we

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First, we

need to look to the parents, how they construct one idea of respect with each other. If a

child

grow

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grows

seeing that their parents always find the solution for their problems by fighting the kid will understand that

this

is the right

way

that she need to behave to solve problems. Is necessary that the parents show patience, care and control of the situation and pass it to the

child

Second

, some kids have

more difficult

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more difficulty

more difficulties

to socialize, which reflects in the

way

that the other kids will look

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for

them and possibly result in bullying. That

way

the

child

will close herself even more and

possible

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possibly

act with angry feelings towards their school friends and parents. Unfortunately, there aren't recipes of

sucess

an event that accomplishes its intended purpose

success

sauces

to create a

child

. It is necessary to have patience and always listen to their feelings, because they are human

too and

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too, and

are dealing with a million

toughts

the content of cognition; the main thing you are thinking about

thoughts

per

second

This

is why I disagree that a children's behaviour is the result of lack of discipline.

Thu Nov 07 2019

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It is currently believed that children's behaviour and misconduct is due to the lack of strict discipline and punishment applied by parents. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Fully explain your ideas

In some cities of the world, cars are replacing bicycles. However, in some cities, bicycle are replacing cars. What are the reason for this for these developments? In your opinion, which one is better?

Living in a country where you have to speak a foreign language can cause serious social problems, as well as practical problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The plans below show a public park when it first opened in 1920 and the samepark today.

Some people say in order to prevent illness and disease, governments should focus on reducing environmental pollution and housing problems. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In many cities, an increasing number of people do not know their neighbors and there is a lack of a sense of community. What are the causes of this problem? How can it be solved?