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Today’s schools should teach their students how to survive financially in the world today. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The world has undergone a large number of transformations. According to these changes human beings have to learn some skills which have not been that much vital in the past. So, the mission of schools should not be confined to just literacy and numeracy. In doing so ,
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aching students some skills to survive in financial aspects of their lives is quite crucial. In my opinion, in most of today’s job's requirements, the necessity of being well-informed about financial aspects of work is felt completely. So, learning these materials and knowledge could result in being qualified for more decent jobs with higher wages and benefits.
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