Some suggest that young people should take a job for few years between school and university. Discuss what the advantages and disadvantages might be for people who do this. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience

Some people recommend that the school graduates should
work
for a few years before enrolling universities.
This
essay will suggest that self-identification is the biggest benefit of
this
and losing belief to
study
is the principal drawback. These days the quality of tertiary
education
is suffering due to its students who could not choose their occupation properly. According to a recent student satisfaction survey of universities conducted by the Mongolian National Statistical Agency, two
third
of the respondents answered that they are dissatisfied with their current
study
because of their incorrect choice of the profession.
Additionally
, it is expected that after their graduation, most of them might not
work
as their professional major.
However
, gap years may allow younger people to recognize themselves by knowing their real interest as well as needs while experiencing different jobs. In my case, one of my university classmates used to
work
prior to
study
the university.
Therefore
, he could understand the profession which is highly suitable for him, and graduated from the university with high distinction along with several job offers. Despite these advantages, some students are persuaded for getting a job
instead
of go directly to higher
education
.
Although
they wish to
initially
acquire a bachelor degree after working for a time, most of them lose gradually their hope to
study
at a higher level
education
due to
work
place adaptation. An illustration of
this
is that one
third
of students who take years off never
study
at universities, as stated by the Ministry of
Education
and Culture of Mongolia’s annual report.
Moreover
, my grandfather could not enter the tertiary
education
because of year off even though receiving an unconditional offer from Lomonosov Moscow State University. In conclusion, taking years off might be advantageous if students use it for identifying themselves effectively,
however
, they should be careful since it can be reducing their motivation to
study
for
further
education
.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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