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Students from disadvantaged families and rural areas are finding it difficult to get a university education. Some people believe that universities should help them. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Getting admission in an educational university is a tougher task for students who belong to rural and poor families. We are going to discuss
this
 topic in
this
 essay.
Although
 to the Some extent I agree with
this
argument but I disagree
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argument, but I also disagree
argument but I also disagree
also
.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
 at the
end I
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end, I
 will give my opinion.
This
 is not baseless to think that students from disadvantaged families and rural area face difficulties in getting
seat
a group of things of the same kind that belong together and are so used
set
 in good educational institute like they don't get proper guidance. The student does not have sufficient money to
spent
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spend
 on coaching classes to prepare for entrance exam of good universities. These difficulties Make them dishearten. But bright students have always ways to secure their admission by hard work. Like
their
in or at that place
there
 are many scholarship programmes which help them to crack the entrance exam.And many social workers and Government institutes are working in rural areas to support the disadvantaged students. So these students need to work harder to get passed through the entry
exam but
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exam, but
 with the help of special programmes which are specially designed to help them,
it
it is
it's
 become possible to be part of good universities.

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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