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Nowadays, experience is more valued in the workplace than knowledge in many countries. Do you think the advantages of this outweigh the disadvantages?

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In recent years, it is generally observed that prior working experience is getting more preferred than the academic intelligence in the offices.
This
 essay will
dicuss
to consider or examine in speech or writing
discuss
 the positives and negatives of giving importance to experienced
candidate
 in the workplace. There are many advantages of preferring
to
being one more than one
two
 experienced
worker
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workers
 in
office
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the office
an office
.
To begin
 with experienced employee is assumed to have learned most of the practical aspects of the
job
 for which he will be appointed. It means, he is more knowledgeable than the fresher
candidate
 and the company will not have to spend their money to teach them the relevant aspects of
job
 again.
Moreover
, the experienced
job
 seeker is more capable to manage the
job
 as compared to the newly qualified
candidate
.
Additionally
, he will grasp the critical functionalities of the
job
 easily and time is not wasted to complete the projects in hand.
Thus
, it is more favourable for the employer to hire the
candidate
 who have prior work experience rather
tha
conjunction used in comparatives
than
the
 hiring a fresher.
Although
, employing an
experieced
having experience; having knowledge or skill from observation or participation
experienced
 person is more favourable, there are some drawbacks to
this
.
Firstly
, he will misuse his prior workplace knowledge against other employees while
on
Suggestion
in
at
 the workplace which may result against the company.
Secondly
, there might be chances that he abuse his position and the less experienced employee who are already working may not get promoted to
higher position
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a higher position
. Another disadvantage is that the employer may require to pay higher salaries to experienced candidates. In conclusion, I think the advantages of hiring people with prior working knowledge is more favourable to the company than fresher, despite of its disadvantages.
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