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Band 7

You have heard that a developer plans to build a shopping centre near your home. Write a letter to the town council. In your letter, do the following: say how you heard about the plan explain how you feel about it ask for more information about it. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am a local resident of Manchester and I am writing to you to express my concern about the new shopping mall which I have heard, will be built near my house. My neighbour who is an employee of the municipal council informs me that a contract has been finalized with a developer and that very soon a shopping centre will be built in my vicinity.
Moreover
, I have heard that the houses in the surroundings will have to be demolished to create space and that the inhabitants will be moved to another place. I am very much concerned about
this
 development and I could not sleep at night ever since I heard the news. I would be grateful if you could please provide me
some
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 more details about the future plans of
this
 shopping mall. Can you please confirm if it is true that some houses will be pulled down with the setting up of
this
 new building? I would appreciate your reply
the earliest
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 possible. Yours Sincerely, Johnny
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Task Achievement
To improve the letter, consider providing alternative solutions or expressing specific concerns about the development, such as the impact on local businesses or traffic. This would demonstrate a greater depth of thought about the issue.
Coherence & Cohesion
To enhance coherence and cohesion, you could use a wider range of linking words and phrases to connect ideas more smoothly. This would create a more fluid reading experience.
Logical Structure
The letter is well-organized with a clear introduction, expression of concern, and a request for information.
Suitable Writing Tone
You have successfully used formal language and a polite tone, which is appropriate for writing to a town council.
Complete Response
You have clearly addressed all the parts of the task: saying how you heard about the plan, explaining how you feel about it, and asking for more information.
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