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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Face to face communication is better than the other types of communication,such as letters,e-mail, or telephone calls. Use specific reasons and details to support your answer.

#face #communication #letters #e-mail #telephone #support
Computers are one of the most important devices in today's world. We are highly dependent in on them for our basic day to day chores. They have developed widely from the time they have been used. There is a drastic change in the computers that were available and the computer’s of
this
 generation. There is a wide application of computers and they are being used by almost every professional. The vast applications of computers from business transactions like recording data,
analyzing
consider in detail and subject to an analysis in order to discover essential features or meaning
analysing
 and
also
 forwarding data plays a vital role in
smooth functioning
Suggestion
the smooth functioning
 of business proposals.
Also
, life and death professions
such
 as medical fraternity, crime detection and flying
aircrafts
a vehicle that can fly
aircraft
 are largely controlled my computer’s. They have become a vital part in the effortless functioning of these specialities. According to me, computer’s are the
future which
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future, which
 we are leaning on. They would be used for a wide range of activities
such
 as automatic vehicles where a car can be controlled by a screen. Some other applications would be in the field of robotics where a single touch on the screen would control robots and which can be a great help in precise medical procedures causing betterment of the society Application of computers is surely
beneficial but
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beneficial, but
 the overgrowing dependence can cause problems in case of breakdown’s. Computer’s should be used for assistance and not for replacing manual work entirely. An event of a breakdown professional's need to be skilled to manage the work rather than going limp in
such
 situations. To conclude, usage if computer’s is advantageous as long as we don’t rely on them solely for our work.
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
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