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Some people believe that hard word is more important than talent. Do you agree or disagree?

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There is no denying that some of the best athletes and musicians have natural talents that help them to be better than most, but is that the main reason why?
Talent
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 does help them to be some of the best, but it is their hard
work
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 added to their
talent
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 that separates them from everyone else. Though
talent
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 is definitely used to choose some of the best players, hard
work
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 is the most dominant factor. When
someone
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 is born talented they are seen as having potenti
al to be
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the potential
successful, but
this
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talent
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 becomes wasted without any hard
work
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 because people need to
practice
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 to improve, do not
practice
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 and the risk is loosing a
talent
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 one might have. On average, those who had more
practice
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 performed at a much higher level than who had little practic
ethe harder
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practice the
someone
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 works the better they become. Unlike hard
work
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,
talent
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 is something
that is
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 a natural gift but easy to lose. Even though you may have a
talent
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 you will lose it if you won't
work
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 hard. Your natural gift will be wasted. If you do not
practice
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 what you have already learnt you will soon forget it.
This
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 is why many people say '
practice
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 makes perfect'. Even if
someone
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 is talented at something, their
talent
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 can disappear if you don’t
work
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 hard to maintain it. If the
talent
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 is forg
otten about
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has forgotten
is forgetting
forgets
it would no longer be of use.
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,
someone
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 could have played a sport and be seen as a talented athlete
but if the
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athlete, but
y become lazy and refuse to play for too long, they would probably be not as talented as they were before. Working hard is more important than just having natural
talent
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, for those who
work
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 harder and longer than others become more successful, more
practice
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.
Talent
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 may give you a head start,
however
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only hard
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however, only
work
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 carry you to the destination. Without hard
work
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,
talent
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 is basically useless.
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, sometimes a
person
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 may have a
talent
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, but without working hard and striving for success
talent
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 doesn’t matter; it is the
person
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 that works harder that wins. The talented individ
ual
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individual, however
however
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, tends to not feel the need to
work
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 as hard due to the fact that
this
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person
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 is able to use less energy to attain decent results. In order to achieve the same results as the talented individual, a hard working
person
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 must harness their potential and try their best. As people
work
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 hard and begin to see themselves improving they begin to become determined because they believe they can keep improving, and they are able to reach their goal.
Someone
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 say tha
t:
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says
“trying to be better than you were yesterday takes a lot of hard
work
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". Hard
work
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 helps to make them confident and determined to get better everyda
y. Once
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every day
determined some will keep pushing themselves until they reach their goal and
then
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 they will set a new goal for themselves. A harder worker giving up on training is like a
someone
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 running a marathon giving up halfway. In my view, I really concede that success is 10 percent
talent
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 and 90 percent hard
wo
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rk hard
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hard, work
Talent
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 may give
someone
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 the upper hand to succeed
ing, but t
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succeed
he ability to
work
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 hard is what is most important.
Someone
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 can train hard and become successful, but they can not
just b
can not
cannot
e talented and never
work
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 because
then
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 they will just lose their
talent
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. Without hard
work
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 a
talent
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 is useless, and people without
talent
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 can
work
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 hard enough to become as good as the talented. Overall, working hard is much more important than just being born with natural
talent
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.

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