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Some people think that zoos are all cruel and should be closed down. Others, however, believe that zoos can be useful in protecting wild animals. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

#people #zoos #animals
Some people would argue that zoos should be shut down as *they cause* torture *to* animals *
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* *Whereas* *others argue* that zoos can be essential to save the wild species. I agree with the
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 allow researchers to do more study on animals. *A trip to the zoo enables children to learn about animals* *
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.)* On the one hand, some activists hold the view that it is wrong to *confine* animals in zoos because animals deserve to live in their natural habitat.
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, according to *a* research done by the Save Animal organisation in India, some medical scientists perform drug tests on zoo animals, which results in *their* death *
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On the other hand
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animals, but
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 educate people to respect wildlife.
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*the* researchers
the *the* researcher
 to protect animals from *disease* by providing *proper* treatment.
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, in Australia, tigers *
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* which *were about* to die due to *the* drought, were saved by the medical *researchers* by keeping them in the zoos and *giving them* *the* right treatment. I
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 support scientists to develop more pathways to protect wildlife.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • animal welfare
  • conservation
  • captive breeding
  • habitat
  • ethical issues
  • zoochosis
  • endangered species
  • genetic diversity
  • reintroduction programs
  • wildlife education
  • sanctuary
  • natural living conditions
  • artificial environments
  • behavioral enrichment
  • ecosystem
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