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The threat of nuclear weapons maintains world peace. Nuclear power provides cheap and clean energy. The benefits of nuclear technology far outweigh the disadvantages. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience.

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The
world
 peace and power of authority is mainly depends
up on
in contact with, on top of
upon
 the nuclear weapon strength.
However
, we can
use
 nuclear
energy
 to make progressive inventions
instead
 of using for our own destruction. In my opinion, Humans can
use
 nuclear
energy
 mainly for
space
technology
, constructions of
road ways
a road (especially that part of a road) over which vehicles travel
roadways
 and
rail ways
Suggestion
railways
 in remote places around the
world
. Nuclear
Technology
 is the main source for
space
 exploration of mankind. The nuclear
technology
 is the key raw material in making satellites, rockets and other equipments related to extraterrestrial exploration around the earth in the
space
.
Space
technology
 is very much helpful in exploring the different planets as an alternative for living beings to live.
For example
, the great Indian scientist A.P.J.Abdul
Kalam who
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Kalam, who
 played pivotal role in Indian
space
research
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research, technology
technology
 once told the governments in the
world
 should focus on nuclear
technology
 which we can
use
 to make our lives better
instead
 of just using it for making Nuclear Bombs, Missiles
etcetera
. Nuclear Bomb inventor invented it with a motive to
use
 the nuclear bomb to break mountains and other hard materials which are obstacles to construct roads, rails and other facilities for the people who live in remote places. Even though the motive of invention is different, we are using it for our own destruction. I am not saying that nuclear weapon
making
an uproarious party
doing
 is wrong, it is useful to show their military strength and
technology
 to defend their nation from enemies.
However
, nuclear
energy
 is widely used in weapon making around the
world
 more than
requirement
Suggestion
the requirement
a requirement
 which
hints
follow stealthily or recur constantly and spontaneously to
haunts
hits
 us for dangerous repercussions which we may face in the future. In conclusion, I would like to support the point that usage of the nuclear
technology
 in making progressive fields for the environment and humankind should be more compared to just using the nuclear
energy
 for making Bombs, Missiles
etcetera
.
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