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Some people think that the government should increase the cost of fuel for cars and other vehicles in order to solve environmental problems. To what extend to you agree or disagree?

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These days, several people think, if the fuel price rate increases, which prevents people from using more and more personalised vehicles.
This
 is because the surge of the figure may unable to afford for the majority of the population; eventually, they may start to depend on the public transports, rather than their own car. Take car pooling as an example,
this
 was the new initiative, when the government introduced a new method to counteract the problem of pollution by doubling petroleum oil rate. And they were successful for a great extent. Many reports have shown that
this
 hike reduced the amount of carbon emission in the atmosphere significantly. Another point is here that as the authorities earn the huge amount of tax from those who still travel in their car,
this
 fund can be channelized for the betterment of the environment.
In other words
, the monies can use to introduce more electric cars, planting more green trees along the sides of the roads, and educating the public about the importance of using the public transport over private one. By taking all these preventive measures, the atmosphere will experience better air quality and less adverse effects of the greenhouse effect. Global warming, slowly, can be eradicated for the certain extent.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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