You are part of a group of musicians who meet on Tuesday and Friday evenings to practise in the community hall. You have been told, however, that it is no longer possible for the group to use the hall. Write a letter to the manager. In the letter: describe what the group does explain why the group is good for the community suggest alternative days and times for practice

Dear Sir/Madam, I am one of the members
in
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the
musicians
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musician's
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group
who practices in your
community
hall. I am writing to request you to please allow us to continue music practice. Our
group
plays songs for Indian festivals. We travelled across the state for our performances. Recently, we got recognised as top 10 bands in the country for
community
music. Our concerts across the state helped people of the same
community
to get together and build relationships. During the
performances
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we have
charitable
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a charitable
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fund
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funds
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collected for
education
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the education
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of underprivileged children. Most of the members in our
group
are university students and sometimes the money earned from our performances is used for their college education. As many of our
group
members are students, we cannot afford any other hall for practising. I humbly request you to please allow
to
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continue our music practice in the
community
hall on Weekend mornings from 6-9 AM. I look forward to
hear
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from you. Your's faithfully, Kalyan
Submitted by kalyanuppalapati25 on

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