Some people say that parent should encourage their children to take part in organized group activities in their free time. others say that it is important for children to learn how to occupy themselves on their own discuss both opinions and give your opinion ?

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In many countries an increasing number of
population
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the population
are suffering
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is suffering
from health disorders as consequence of consuming too much fast
food
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.
so
to a very great extent or degree
So
it is necessary for governments to impose
heavy tax
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heavy taxes
a heavy tax
on
this
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kind of
food
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.
Icompletely
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I completely
agree with the above statement. Junk
food
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is anytime deprived of nutritions
.
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.
consuming
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Consuming
such
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food
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can result in variety
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can result in a variety
can result in varying
can result in varying varying
of diseases in humans.
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this
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This
type of
food
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need to be regulated by levying on fast
food
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that makes people to not buy fast
food
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.
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,
In
korea
an Asian peninsula (off Manchuria) separating the Yellow Sea and the East Sea; the Korean name is Dae-Han-Min-Gook or Han-Gook
Korea
, all fast
food
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are
chraged
of a particle or body or system; having a net amount of positive or negative electric charge
charged
with heavy taxes so that consumers will not buy
such
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food
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.
Also
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, customer will stop buying fast
food
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.
in addition
Moreover
moreover
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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