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Cheaper airfare has increased air travel in the last decade and it has positive effects on nations as per some while others disagree. Discuss both the views. Give your opinion.

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Air
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flights
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 have caused a surge in
air
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travel
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 over the
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 decade, which has caused
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development in different sectors. In my opinion increase in
air
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travel
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 has brought forward many opportunities and profits for
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various fields. To embark upon my view, one can easily see a direct contribution of cheaper
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travel
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on
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 tourism of any place. An increase in tourism leads to
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 of local businesses, contributing
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 the financial growth of the place. Cheaper
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travel
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 acts as a catalyst to import and export of goods which
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 helps the economy of a country. Other than these bigger impacts, time saving is an obvious benefit.
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 can be particularly helpful in providing immediate aid in case of disasters and other emergencies.
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 statistics,
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travel
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 is the safest of all means of transport. Other the other hand, one can argue,
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flights
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 have been a constant target of terrorist groups. News on the hijacked
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 by terrorist organisations for ransoms and freedom for captive terrorists has not been in the very distant past. The incident of
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9/11 is a dreadful example
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 when
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 were hijacked and used as a weapon which killed so many people. Other than that, some
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 claim
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 cause a disturbance for birds and sometimes even
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 to their death. In conclusion, I would like to state,
all
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 inventions can be used in the way
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pleases
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 us. So, it is up to us how we utilise
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 and how we make it safer.
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 cannot deny all the positive effects it has on the economy and public transport.

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