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Do you think the significance of English language as an international language will be lost with globalization or its significance will increase with globalization? What is your opinion?

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One of the most conspicuous trends of today's world is a colossal upsurge in the usage of
English
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 language in almost every part of the earth, thanks to globalization. There is a widespread worry that increased exposure
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 other languages and cultures will threaten the dominance of the
English
 language,
this
 apprehension is unwarranted and so should be rejected. There
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 a myriad of arguments in favour of my stance,
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those most
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 one is that thanks to globalization, the interaction between people from different
jargons
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 and diverse cultural backgrounds will inevitably increase. As
English
 is already the most widely used dialect throughout the sphere, not only will it help people to communicate effectively with each other, but it will
also
 be embraced by more and more people. Needless to say,
this
 universal appeal of
English
 will keep it in a preponderant position, as far as gaining more popularity is concerned. Another pivotal aspect of
this
 argument is that now
English
 is the speech of Science, Commerce, trade, arts, history, literature, media, entertainment and
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. Unlike in the past, when the globe was not much connected without a common expression and so it was next to impossible to keep abreast with the latest happenings, nowadays
English
 has helped mankind overcome all communication barriers.
Hence
, the likelihood that
English
 will thrive, flourish and spread rapidly is very high. In view of the arguments outlined above, one can conclude that the benefits of globalization in the proliferation of
English
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 language are too great to ignore.

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task response
Please ensure that your introduction clearly presents your stance and provides a clear preview of the main points you will discuss. Also, make sure to provide a balanced argument by addressing counter-arguments if appropriate.
coherence cohesion
Your essay shows some coherence with the use of transition words and phrases, but the logical order of the ideas is not always clear. Work on organizing your ideas so that they build on each other effectively.

Fully explain your ideas

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For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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