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Some people think that all university students should study whatever they like. Others believe that they should only be allowed to study subjects that will be useful in the future such as those related to science and technology. discuss both views and give your opinion

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Good choice of courses actually determines generally how proficient someone would perform later on in
career
life
. Some individuals believe that the undergraduate students should be given the opportunity to
study
 science and
technology
 courses that will be relevant later on in
life
, others are of the opinion that these students should only take courses of their choice. I am of the opinion that with the advancement in
technology
 and sciences, students should only consider courses related to
this
 field. Choosing a
career
 pathway should only be determined by the student.
This
 is because when
this
 decision is made freely by the student based on an
interest
 and not on cohesion,
such
 student will perform excellently in the
career
life
.
For example
, my mum had wanted me to
study
 medicine, which I never had an
interest
 in, even after I gained admission into the medical school, I had to change into nursing which I have a passion for because my performance was poor which was likened to lack of
interest
.
This
 actually shows that giving undergraduates the freedom to make
career
 choices improves proficiency in the ladder of
career
 pathway.
However
, despite the fact that students should be given the liberty to make choices of courses to
study
, it is actually more beneficial if these students should channel their
interest
 in courses relating to science and
technology
. The increasing advancement in
technology
 has called for more body of knowledge and in order to meet up with
this
 demand, having more professions in
this
 field will be worthwhile.
For instance
, in China, about 90 percent of courses being taught in schools are all science-related and today China ranks the most advanced countries worldwide. In conclusion,
although
 allowing students to decide for themselves the courses to
study
 enhance sound performance later in
life
career
life
.
Nevertheless
, having students studying more about science and
technology
 courses will be more beneficial in the world
that is
 ever-increasing in
technology
.
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Topic Vocabulary:
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  • engagement
  • excel
  • innovative contributions
  • diversity in research
  • well-rounded education
  • broad perspectives
  • critical thinking skills
  • mental well-being
  • burnout
  • forced academic paths
  • job-ready
  • skills shortages
  • tech-driven economy
  • employment rates
  • changing job market
  • utilitarian subjects
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