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The tendency of news reports in the media to focus more on problems and emergencies rather than on positive developments is harmful to individuals and society. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is true that we are likely finding more and more negative news appeared on media
everyday
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every day
.
Although
 I understand that those hot and urgent news should be delivered to readers in
timely manner
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a timely manner
, I absolutely agree that more concentration on problems and bad news would be harmful for both inhabitants and society.
Firstly
,
those
denotes a person or thing
this
 information would bring worries and anxiety
for
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in
 people. If the news is about horrible crimes conducted in the area, local people would be afraid of their surroundings, including
neighbors
a person who lives (or is located) near another
neighbours
, relatives. And it is apparently that less interpersonal interaction would kill relationships, and friendliness.
For
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Far
 worse, as long as I know in some states in the United States, everyone tries to possess
gun
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guns
 to protect themselves from
weaponing
an event that happens
happening
 robbers.
As a result
, living in cautious and anxious conditions is what people in these areas experiencing.
Secondly
, the more crimes tend to happen which
are stemmed
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have stemmed
are stemming
stem
 from the fact that the more bad news are being spread.
For example
, juveniles might think it is ordinary doing similar activities
such
 as drinking, smoking or under-age driving, given they might have seen somewhere
on
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in
 the press or websites that there is a high proportion of young people using those things. Those bad news
then
 would become triggering factors which may lead to more potential problems to happen. In conclusion, as of above mentioned reasons, I completely agree that negative news is harmful for both individuals and society,
therefore
, positive developments should be more focused rather than problems and emergency news in the media.

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