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In the last 20 years there have been significant developments in the field of information technology (IT), for example the World Wide Web and communication by email. However, these developments in IT are likely to have more negative effects than positive in the future. To what extent do you agree with this view?

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In the
last
 two decades, there has been a boom in the information technology (IT) sector and the communication has all together changed due to the development of the email system.
Although
,
this
 progress is eye catching, but it will have a negative impact in the years to come. In my opinion, I fully disagree with
this
, as technological advancement has turned
this
 world into a global village and has
also
 made our lives more comfortable.
Firstly
, improvements in the IT field have brought the nations more closer. Due to the use of internet, people have an easy access to the latest inventions of the world. On the one hand, there is an exchange of ideas and innovations more frequent. While
on the other hand
, there is an increase in competition among the countries to produce the best results.
Moreover
, due to the access of Watsapp, Facebook, Instagram and email, the social circle of individuals has increased and the families,
although
 settled in different parts of the world, are more glued together.
For example
, a recent study conducted in the UK has shown that there is a decline of loneliness among elderly people due to the enhanced use of social media groups on the internet.
Secondly
, technology progress has made the life more cosy and full of comfort. Man has developed marvellous things for his ease, like cars, aeroplanes, mobile phones, air conditioners, televisions and many more things have been invented which have made the living conducive and easy.
This
 has a direct impact on the social behaviour of a population.
Moreover
,
this
 has
also
 brought peace and harmony in the society.
For example
, a study published in the USA states that the progress of the nation is directly proportional to its lifestyle. To conclude, tremendous work in the subject of science and technology has made our lives easier and the effective interaction has compounded
this
 effect.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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