The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The pie charts below show the average household expenditures in Japan and Malaysia in the year 2010.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The pie graphs illustrate the proportions of outgoings in two different cities,
Japan
and
Malaysia
, in the year 2010, namely, housing, transport, food, health care, and
others
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other
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goods and services.
Overall
, the major proportion of expenditures was other goods and services in
Japan
while
the main outgoing was housing in
Malaysia
.
However
, the lowest percentages were health care spending in both countries. It can be seen that the greatest amount of housing expenditures in
Malaysia
was lower than in
Japan
with 34% and 21% respectively as the percentages of health care outgoing in
Malaysia
were twice less than Japanese’s with 6% and 3%.
In addition
in
Japan
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,Japan
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the transport expense (20%) was twice that of
Malaysia
(10%)
In contrast
. Food expense in
Japan
(24%) was 3% lower than in
Malaysia
(27%). Yet, compared with other goods and services in
Japan
at 29%, their
percentages
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percentage
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was
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were
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3% higher than
Malaysia
’s at 26%.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, malaysia with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "percentages" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "proportions" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "go" was used 3 times.

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