Some people think that a sense of competition in children should be encouraged. Others believe that children who are taught to co-operate rather than compete become useful adults. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

Nowadays, the society is experiencing different ways to educate children. A part of the public

think

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thinks

that is

better to encourage students, starting from childhood, competing between them in order to

encourage them express

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encourage them to express

their own potentials.

By contrast

, another part of society

promoute

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Promote

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to educate

children co

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children, co

-operating, so they will be able to work in groups. I personally agree in some parts with

either

not the same one or ones already mentioned or implied

other

parts and in

this

essay I am gonna write how and about either side. On one hand, the competition is undoubtedly one of the best methods to make students overcame their limits.

On the other hand

, I

think is

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think, is

not correct to use the competition pattern

to

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for

children, but only with more mature students

such

as those attending high school. Why is not a good educational method for them? Because children could

became

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become

depressed it

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depressed, it

depressed if

they cannot win, starting to think they will never win. For

this

reason

this

method may result in the

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being directly across from each other; facing

opposite

aim.

children

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Children

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competiot

properly or sufficiently qualified or capable or efficient

competent

not good but good in youth,

encorauged

inspired with confidence

encouraged

to do better to

overcame

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overcome

their limits, prices, value, deserve

Maked

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Make

this

point,

probrably

with considerable certainty; without much doubt

probably

the best way to educate children is to make them collaborate so they understand the importance of sharing,

for example

games, and they

also

learn that working together is a

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occupy a large, elongated area

stretch

.

For instance

, I have a little cousin that

everytime

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every time

that we

met she

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met, she

told me about her schoolmates, especially that she enjoys to create

castels

a large and stately mansion

castles

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with them and drawing. She

has learn

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has learned

has learnt

a lot from primary school, indeed at

first

she was really stubborn and did not want to go to school with other children, but

then

she

realise

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realises

that she is happy to co-operate and to share her experience with others. In conclusion,

although

competition is a really good way to learn how to express ourselves, in my

opinion

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opinion, this

this

is not the right pattern of education for children,

wheras

In or at or to what place

where

whereas

the co-operation within

mates

a thick flat pad used as a floor covering

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for children could be the best, making them understand the important values of working in

group

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a group

groups

, trust and love between each other.