Some people think that it is more beneficial to take part in sports which are played in teams, like football. While other people think that taking part in individual sports is better, like tennis or swimming. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

These
days as
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days, as
there are numerous sports which are beneficial to people in reduce obesity and waste time. While some people opine that playing personal’s sports is better, I subscribe to participate as a
team
.
Individuals
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Individual
sports is a sport which we can play with your opponent or one player and there are several explanations that playing
individuals
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individual
sports is very beneficial.
Firstly
, playing sports
such
as badminton or tennis helps people who play avoid accident each other when they play as they play on both side and separate by a net.
Secondly
,
player
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players
the player
can play anytime they want, do not need to depend on others
for
example do
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example, do
jogging or fitness they can practice alone in the morning or after work.
Also it
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Also, it
helps people create a mental strength by working through
challenge
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challenges
the challenge
a challenge
, create personal mastery and do not
reliance
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rely
on others performance as they can focus on training needs and solve their personal weakness. Notwithstanding the aforementioned discussions my view is that playing sports as a
team
can provide more advantageous for people.
Team
sports helps people to connect with new friends, people that they do not know. Not just that, a
team
sport helps player in the
team
can build their
skills particularly
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skills, particularly
teamwork and help other people who are weaker in training or learn from
other
plural of other; the people or things not already mentioned
others
.
In addition
, it helps member
in
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of
the
team
share their emotion when a
team
win
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wins
or supporting each other when a
team
lost.
Finally
, playing a
team
sport helps people save their money for buying an equipment,
for example
the equipment for athlete play tennis is more expensive than play soccer,
also
the place to organize a match is
also
cheaper as people in a
team
together can pay the money for rent. For the foregoing arguments, it appears to me that playing in a
team
is more joyful and make more friends in the society.

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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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