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In some countries the average weight of people is increasing and their levels of health and fitness are decreasing. What are the causes of this problem and what are some solutions?

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Whereas the majority of electricity is produced from natural resources. Non -renewable energy sources make up far less of total electricity than non- renewable. Focusing on the UK, which experienced a reduction in the production of the number of air conditioners, from April to July.
Thereafter
, the production started to grow and reached its all time high in the month of October. The graph illustrates the number of air conditioning units which were sold in the UK and Australia over a seven month period in 2011 between April and October. The pie chart compares the amount of energy which is produced from four different sources, whereas the bar chart compare how much proportion of
this
 energy, which goes towards different uses in the home. The pie chart compares the amount of fertilizers is produced by four different sources, whereas the table highlights how much p
roportion
the activity of putting or setting in order in advance of some act or purpose
preparation
 of these fertilizers goes towards each crop. The diagram highlights the process by which honey is produced and bees make their honey. The diagram illustrates the process by which car door is commercially manufactured. The process by which salmon completes its life cycle. The maps compare the various development happens to a city between 1990 and 2000, over a 10 year period of time. Prior to and following the development of tourist infrastructure.The maps compare a city prior to and following the development of its i
nfrstructure.
the basic structure or features of a system or organization
infrastructure
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