“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

#“prevention #cure” #diseases #measures

Healthcare is most important responsibilities of our

government

Prevention

from

Suggestion

the diseases can be more helpful

then

conjunction used in comparatives

than

, treating the diseases. I strongly agree the we should be focused on

prevention

rather than treatment. Most of the people in our country

is getting

Suggestion

are getting

aware after they became ill. Recent survey held in 2018, shows that most of the people becoming ill because of their careless attitude towards the health.

For example

its

it is

it's

clearly mentioned on the cigarette that smoking can

be cause

for the reason that; on account of

because

of cancer but still people consuming it.

This

attitude developed among people because some people are suffering from the

cancer even

Accept comma addition

cancer, even

, they are not having

smoke

Suggestion

smoked

. Our

government

must take a strong step towards awareness for the

prevention

of the diseases.

Prevention

measures will be more help for our economic growth as well as social. For an instant example,

few decades

Suggestion

a few decades

ago polio

Accept comma addition

ago, polio

was one of the common disease.

This

disease was incurable in those days,

then

government

Suggestion

the government

gave the attention towards the

prevention

of the disease rather than treating it. Now, polio is

vanished

Suggestion

vanishing

from our country just because of the

prevention

That is

why

government

should invest in

prevention

instead

of cure.

Prevention

helps us to remove the problem even before having it. To conclude, in above statements it’s given the clear step that

government

should start

awareness camp

Suggestion

an awareness camp

for

prevention

methods. It will help to give the benefits to our whole society. According to me, treatment is more difficult than taking

prevention

, it

also

needs a less efforts and money.

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“Prevention is better than cure”. Researching and treating diseases is too costly so it would be better to invest in preventative measures. To what extent do you agree?

Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Nowadays some professionals such as doctors, lawyers and engineers are paid much higher than ordinary workers. What do you think of this trend? Are there any jobs which you think should offer higher salaries?

Some people say that now is the best time in history to be living. What is your opinion about this? What other time in history would be interesting to live in?

Describe some of the problems overreliance on cars can cause and suggest a possible solution.

the money spent by goverenment on space programmes would e better spent on vitl public services such asschool and hospitals.To what extend do you agree or disagree.

Human activities have led negative effects on plant and animals all over the world. Some people think it is too late to do something about it. Others think there is still some time to take actions. Discuss both views and give your opinion.