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Some people think that the teenage years are the happiest times of most people’s lives. Others think that adult life brings more happiness, in spite of greater responsibilities. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

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Happiness
 is all what we want in our lives, some people believe that teenage is the happiest time in their lives while some believe
adult
life
 brings more
happiness
. Teenage seems to be
best
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better
 because the focus is only studying & playing with fewer responsibilities. But
on the other hand
,
Adult
life
 too has its own point of
happiness
 like
feeling
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the feeling
 of having kids. In my Opinion
adult
life
 brings more
happiness
 because of the feeling of having kids associated with it. Some people have good memories associated with their teenage
memories that’s
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memories, that’s
 why they tend to think that teenage is the most happiest. The major reason associated with
this
 is, in teenage you just have to concentrate on studies & playing and rest all the responsibilities are taken care of by your parents. In my teenage,
for
example I
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example, I
 only had two things to concentrate upon,
first
 is studying and
second
 is playing. So the focus was pretty much clear with every
teenager so
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teenager, so
 you tend to enjoy
more as
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more, as
 every teenager is doing the same thing. While
on the other hand
 people can relate to good memories of their
adulthood so
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adulthood, so
 they have a feeling of
happiness
 associated with
adult
life
. The benefits
in
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of
adult
life
 are that you have your own freedom in terms of doing anything you want & the feeling of having kids is the happiest moment for most of the people.
For example
, when I recently had a
baby which
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baby, which
 was a year back, I can relate to it that it was the best moment of my whole
life
 till now. In my Opinion having a
kid which
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kid, which
 was the best moment in my
life
 so my
bend
bind or tie together, as with a band
band
 is more towards the
adult
life
 and
in addition
 to that I didn’t
had
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have
 a good feeling associated with my teenage as I am not the one who likes to study a lot.
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  • Formative years
  • Autonomy
  • Fulfillment
  • Wisdom
  • Significant choices
  • Exploration
  • Financial responsibilities
  • Deeper relationships
  • Personal growth
  • Accomplishments
  • Character development
  • Life milestones
  • Adulthood
  • Adolescence
  • Carefree nature
  • Achievements
  • Life satisfaction
  • Stress-free
  • Independence
  • Responsibilities
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