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Some people think that money is the best gift to give youngsters, while others disagree. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #money #gift #youngsters
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The given bar chart
provide
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provides
 the information about the amount of money earned via exporting several products of a particular country in 2015 and 2016. The data table illustrates the differences in percentages of the provided categories in 2016 in relation to those in 2015. Overall, 2016 figures were generally higher than 2015 ones, with an exception of gems and jewellery.
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, petroleum products had the highest value in all given sectors in both two years. In the
first
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 bar chart, there was an equal between petroleum products and engineered goods’ values in 2016, both standing at just over 60
billion
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 dollars, which were slightly higher than the 2015 value numbers.
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, only just above 30
billion
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 dollars were earned by exporting agricultural products in 2015 and 2016. The exporting of textiles made approximately another 30
billion
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 dollars for the country in 2016, which was around 25
billion
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dollar
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dollars
 in 2015,
siginificantly
in a statistically significant way
significantly
 lower than other sectors. It is interesting to notice that the exporting of gems and jewellery experienced a downward trend. In 2015,
this
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 industry’s exports was worth roughly at 42
billion
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 dollars and
then
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 decreased moderately in the following, to about 40
billion
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 dollars. To the data table, all the values witnessed increasing patterns one year after 2015, while the opposite was true for gems and jewellery, declining by 5.18%. Other categories’ values grew modestly, except for textiles which rose dramatically
by
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from
 more than 15% in 2016.
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    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
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    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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