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Some people think universities should accept equal numbers of male and female students in every subject. Others believe that this is an unacceptable policy. How far do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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It is often maintained that universities should allocate equal seats for
both
 male and female students. I partially agree with
this
 idea and
this
 essay will put forward some points to back it. On the one hand, equal seats at universities provide equal opportunities for
both
 genders.
This
, in its turn, will help prevent
gender
 based discrimination and contribute to more fun,
colorful
having striking color
colourful
 classes and events.
Moreover
, since society needs
both
gender
 specialists, especially in the fields
such
 as education and medicine, equal
number
 of university graduates will assure that these needs will be met.
On the other hand
, there are some factors which prove accepting
equal
Suggestion
an equal number
number
 of male and female students is not necessary.
In other
words
Accept comma addition
words, this
this
 should be left to the natural tendency that reflects
interests
Suggestion
the interests
 of students irrespective of their
gender
.
Furthermore
, the process of selecting students considering
equal
Suggestion
an equal number
number
 of seats for
both
 genders is a time-consuming and complicated issue. On top of all these,
considerable
Suggestion
a considerable number
number
 of
talanted
endowed with talent or talents
talented
 students among in either of genders will encounter disfavour and
this
 will eventually work for the advantage of less gifted students that are accepted primarily for the reason of filling the
allotes
give out
allots
 seats. In conclusion, I admit that
equal
Suggestion
an equal number
number
 of male and female students guarantee equal opportunities and satisfy the needs of society for
both
gender
 specialists.
However
,
this
 should not be a rigid rule and
instead
 should carve a way for the natural tendency based on students individual interests.
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