The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can you suggest?

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Nowadays, almost every

people

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person

are improving

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is improving

economic condition.

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, like the parallel link does not intersect every person's situation is uplifted

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, the difference has not narrowed. In

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essay, I will discuss serious problems of the issue with solutions.

Firstly

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, income depends on the

investment

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made by them. Generally, people who have huge

investment

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are wealthy people and less

investment

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are relatively poor people.

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, wealthy people have

high net worth so, they

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a high net worth, so they

a high net worth so, they

can start a

business

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with huge capital which results in high return.

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, the poor may have a brilliant

idea but

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idea, but

a deficiency of money will not allow them to start up any

business

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For example

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, my brother could not

setup

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set up

business

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so, he joined a job in a multinational company for

high

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higher

pay wage whereas, one friend of mine who had relatively more capital started

business

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and has been successful. The solution to

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could be sharing ideas with the investor company and people.

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, Anil Ambani is one of the famous capital investors in India. He has aided in the establishment and improvement of many companies. Another problem is the high-interest rate. In the context of Nepal, the tourism sector has high prospects of

development but

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development, but

the

investment

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required is high.

while

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While

people have a deficiency of cash, some people try to take a loan and start-up

business

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but after a few years they have shut down. There are many examples of people being bankrupt. A recent

example could

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example, could

be Bijaya Maliya who was one of the richest

dwell

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dwellers

of India who was bankrupt and has left the country. High interest forces people to pay more return which must be earned from what they have started.

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initial income

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the initial income

may be low which urges them to close the company. The solution could be providing

enterpuner

a person who tries to please or amuse

entertainer

loans at minimal cost by the government which promotes

upliftment

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of the economy of the country itself. In conclusion, while problems like low

investment

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and high-interest rates can be solved by providing loans at reasonable prices and backing international and national investors. Governments can take these steps to solve the problem related to

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Thu Nov 14 2019

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 6.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 6.0

Complete response

6.5

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

359 words

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The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can you suggest?

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Many people believe that countries should produce food for the whole population and import as little food as possible. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

People, who go to live in other countries should follow the customs and tradition of the new country, to what extent to do you agree or disagree?

People believe that some individuals are born with leadership skills, while others think that leadership skills can be made. Discuss both views.

With advancing technology, the development of automated vehicles is becoming reality. In your opinion, what are the advantages and disadvantages of self-driving vehicles?