The gap between rich and poor is increasing. What problems does it cause? What solution can you suggest?

Nowadays, almost every
people
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person
are improving
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is improving
economic condition.
However
, like the parallel link does not intersect every person's situation is uplifted
hence
, the difference has not narrowed. In
this
essay, I will discuss serious problems of the issue with solutions.
Firstly
, income depends on the
investment
made by them. Generally, people who have huge
investment
are wealthy people and less
investment
are relatively poor people.
Hence
, wealthy people have
high net worth so, they
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a high net worth, so they
a high net worth so, they
can start a
business
with huge capital which results in high return.
On the other hand
, the poor may have a brilliant
idea but
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idea, but
a deficiency of money will not allow them to start up any
business
.
For example
, my brother could not
setup
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set up
business
so, he joined a job in a multinational company for
high
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higher
pay wage whereas, one friend of mine who had relatively more capital started
business
and has been successful. The solution to
this
could be sharing ideas with the investor company and people.
For example
, Anil Ambani is one of the famous capital investors in India. He has aided in the establishment and improvement of many companies. Another problem is the high-interest rate. In the context of Nepal, the tourism sector has high prospects of
development but
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development, but
the
investment
required is high.
while
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While
people have a deficiency of cash, some people try to take a loan and start-up
business
but after a few years they have shut down. There are many examples of people being bankrupt. A recent
example could
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example, could
be Bijaya Maliya who was one of the richest
dwell
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dwellers
of India who was bankrupt and has left the country. High interest forces people to pay more return which must be earned from what they have started.
Hence
initial income
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the initial income
may be low which urges them to close the company. The solution could be providing
enterpuner
a person who tries to please or amuse
entertainer
loans at minimal cost by the government which promotes
upliftment
of the economy of the country itself. In conclusion, while problems like low
investment
and high-interest rates can be solved by providing loans at reasonable prices and backing international and national investors. Governments can take these steps to solve the problem related to
this
.

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