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The maintenance of public libraries is a waste of money because of computer technologies that have the same function. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Many people believe that free community libraries are not in much use in the modern era of computers.
Hence according
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Hence, according
 to them maintenance of these libraries is a waste of resources. I completely disagree with
this
 view as public libraries help people who cannot afford
money
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the money
 for the
internet
.
Additionally
, it is difficult to verify whether online
information
 is real or fake. On the one hand, several lines of evidence suggest that public libraries help many people to gain knowledge and
information
.
To begin
 with, there are many students who are not able to spend money for personal computers and
hence
 use libraries to get knowledge and
information
.
Furthermore
, community libraries are the cheapest
source
 of
information
 for everyone.
Also
 in rural areas where
internet
 access is still limited, public libraries are the
source
 of
information
 for students.
On the other hand
, the
internet
 is not a reliable
source
 of
information
.
Firstly
, there is too much
information
 available on the
internet
 which makes it difficult for students to differentiate between fake and real
information
.
Also
, just about anyone can post anything on the
internet
. There is no one to verify the veracity of
content
Suggestion
the content
 posted by online users.
Consequently
,
chances
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the chances
 of coming
across false
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across as false
 or harmful
information
 on the
internet
 are pretty high. To conclude,
although
 the
internet
 has made the
information
 readily available, books are still the most trusted
source
 of
information
 as they are written by well known academicians and researchers.
Hence
, the government should continue to spend money on the maintenance of public libraries as these are important sources of knowledge.

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