The table below gives information about students enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The table shows information about pupils
Correct pronoun usage
who have
have
applied at Bristol University, depending on Change the verb form
has
years
. The first result is a surge of students enrolled: the number of them climbed slightly from 1928 to 1958, Correct article usage
the years
while
in the next
period was being
Unnecessary verb
apply
sharply
and to peak in Change the word
sharp
last
year with 6377 new freshman
. The percentage of females dropped in the first sector, Change to a plural noun
freshmen
whereas
we can see how there was a rapid increase of
it in 2008. Change preposition
in
Although
, it didn't happen the same for the males, in fact
their percentage point grew from 58% to 68% and Add the comma(s)
,fact
then
, they collapsed to 46% in 2008. Another task is the proportion between
pupils Change preposition
of
came
from close Correct pronoun usage
who came
Bristol
and those from overseas. The first ones plummeted each year, as long as there were fewer points in 2008, unlike the Change preposition
to Bristol
second
ones soared and also
the number of countries, whence they came from, rocked from 3 to 98.Unauthorized use and/or duplication of this material without express and written permission from this site’s author and/or owner is strictly prohibited. Excerpts and links may be used, provided that full and clear credit is given to Writing9 with appropriate and specific direction to the original content.
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