The table below gives information about students enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.

The table below gives information about students enrolments at Bristol University in 1928, 1958 and 2008. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where revelant.
The table shows information about pupils
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applied at Bristol University, depending on
years
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. The first result is a surge of students enrolled: the number of them climbed slightly from 1928 to 1958,
while
in the
next
period was
being
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sharply
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and to peak in
last
year with 6377 new
freshman
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. The percentage of females dropped in the first sector,
whereas
we can see how there was a rapid increase
of
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it in 2008.
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, it didn't happen the same for the males, in
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their percentage point grew from 58% to 68% and
then
, they collapsed to 46% in 2008. Another task is the proportion
between
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pupils
came
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from close
Bristol
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and those from overseas. The first ones plummeted each year, as long as there were fewer points in 2008, unlike the
second
ones soared and
also
the number of countries, whence they came from, rocked from 3 to 98.

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