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Several languages are in danger of extinction because they are spoken by very small numbers of people. Some people say that government should spend public money on saving these languages, While others believe that would be a waste of money. Discuss both these views and give your opinion.

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It is true that
minority
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 languages may disappear in the near future.
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 it can be argued that governments could save
money
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 by allowing
this
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 to happen, I believe that these languages should be protected and preserve. There are several reasons why saving
minority
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 languages could be seen as a waste of
money
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.
Firstly
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, if a
language
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 is only spoken by a small number of people, expensive education programmes will be needed to make sure that more people learn it, and the state has to pay for the facilities, teachers and marketing.
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money
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 might better spent on other public services.
Secondly
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, it would more cheaper and
efficient
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efficiently
 for countries to have just one
language
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.
the
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The
 Government could cut all
kind
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kinds
 of costs related to communicating with each
minority
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 group. Despite the above arguments, I
beleive
accept as true; take to be true
believe
 that government should try to preserve languages that are less widely spoken. A
language
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 is much more than simply a means of communication, it has a vital connection with
cultural identity
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the cultural identity
 of the people who speak it. If a
language
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 disappears, a whole way life
is disappear
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disappears
 with it, and we will lose the rich cultural diversities that
makes
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make
 societies more interesting. By spending
money
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 to protect
minority
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 languages, governments can
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 preserve traditions, customs and behaviours that are part of
country's history
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the country's history
. In conclusion, it may save
money
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 in the short term if we allow
minority
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 languages to disappear, but in the long term
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 would have an extremely negative impact on our cultural heritage.
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