Children are facing more pressure nowadays from academic, social and commercial perspectives . What are the causes of these pressures and what measures should be taken to reduce the pressure?

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Minors in every part of the world are handed immense pressure these days due to schooling
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socializing and commercial part of
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the view
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phases in a very little age.
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believe the teaching pattern in schools has played a major role in the
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an event that happens
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pressure conditions.The
curicculum
an integrated course of academic studies
curriculum
curriculums
curricula
in schools
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mid term exams
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homeworks
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completions
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have forced students to focus on their studies
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even if they are not in a condition to study mentally.But knowing what circumstances can occur if the work is left incomplete
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students push themselves and complete the work given at any cost.
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has led to a decrease in
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the playtime
of students, and eventually having no physical activity in their daily routines.
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having a social life is considered essential
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but due to the schooling time table it has not gone very well.Students have started to feel lonely as the work schedule has made them spend less time with friends
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family etc.
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Children
Childrens
have started to acknowledge the lack of communication
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which has made them less familiar with commercial skills.They have started to lack the
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skill set
needed for commercial means.Over pampering can
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play a leading role in
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the occurrence
occurrence
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lacking skills. To conclude
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I should say children should be taught to resolve
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tense conditions by their parents themselves.Every aspect should be given equal importance
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and not just academics should be prioritized.Physical activities and proper guidance should be provided in the school itself.
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shall help students cope up with the speed of society and
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make fit for, or change to suit a new purpose
adapt
to the surroundings.
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