The growing number of overweight people is putting a strain on the health care system in an effort to deal with the health issues involved. Some people think that the best way to deal with this problem is to introduce more physical education lessons in the school curriculum. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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It is argued that the increasing number of
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problems associated with obesity has put a lot of
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the burden
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care systems all over the world. While some individuals believe that the ultimate solution is to incorporate additional physical
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lessons into the school curriculum, I agree
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is one way to improve national weight problem, but there are
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factors that should be held into account.
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essay will discuss the different means in order to address the issue. On the one hand, as part of
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the school’s physical education program
a school’s physical education program
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program, various sports can be introduced, daily routine exercises and physical game activities can be implemented. In
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way students can become more physically active and participate while enjoying themselves, especially in the sport they are interested in.
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advantageous, it is not enough to effectively resolve the said issue. Healthy died campaigns must be included, where schools will strictly implement a no-junk
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policy, for
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, allowing the canteens to only offer healthy food and drink options to the students. A prime example is the Philippines’ department of
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where it recently launched its campaign for healthy food choices to be offered to the students.
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is to be actualized along with the implementation of the physical
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program.
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, the participation of the local government is
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vital. Creating activities like daily fitness programs, organising fun run events, and many other forms of promoting healthy lifestyles must be encouraged.
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, awareness of proper nutrition must be promoted, where backyard vegetable
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is supported by the local government. Research findings from
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the World Health Organisation show
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Organisation show that mobilising the general public, adults and parents
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, to join in
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awareness programs, greatly contribute in helping the schools raise children’s consciousness, in living a healthy
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, avoiding the problems linked to obesity. In conclusion, I agree that school physical
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activities are beneficial,
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it will be sufficient for
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care system to handle the
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problems. Healthy
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programs must be available, pushing forward a need for collaborations between schools and local communities, wherein adults, parents most especially, participate in the community so they can serve as an example to the children.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • obesity rates
  • health care system
  • physical education
  • instill
  • long term
  • raise awareness
  • healthier lifestyle choices
  • nutritional education
  • active transport
  • quality of instruction
  • facilities and equipment
  • diet control initiatives
  • community sports programs
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