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Fossil fuels are the main source of energy for most countries. However, alternative source of energy (wind and solar) have been encouraged to be used by some countries. To what extent is this a positive or negative development?

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Human's reliability on fossil fuels has been always a debatable topic over the years. Even today, many countries completely rely on these forms of
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 while some take an extra effort to promote other forms of
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 production.
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 with, fossil fuel, a non-renewable
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, is running out. To exemplify, a study conducted by an American university has revealed that, at present, crude oil is vanishing at a rate of 4 billion tonnes per year, and if
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 trend continues, these oil reserves will dry out within 50 years.
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 to that burning of fossil fuels aggravates various environmental issues, for huge carbon dioxide flames are emitted from
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 process so that UV rays from the sun get trapped in the earth's atmosphere, and it leads to global warming.
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, the renewable
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 sources
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 as sunlight and wind are abundant in supply. Because of that, there is no need to concern about its availability in the earth: it helps many a countries, where fossil fuel deposits are inadequate to meet their demands, to stand on their own feet by reducing fossil fuel import from alien lands. Apart from
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, during power production, these alternative
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 sources leave zero chance for carbon dioxide emission compare to conventional forms, and the conservation of the environment is guaranteed up to an extent. To sum up, even though many nations still depend on fossil fuels, the time has arrived to find an alternative
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, which are comparatively less polluting, for the sustainable development of countries.As
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, there is no doubt that if governments promote
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 constructive method, the better will be the result.
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