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It is now possible for scientists and tourists to travel to remote natural environment, such as the South Pole. What are advantages and disadvantages of this development?

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Nowadays because
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Nowadays, because
 of the improvement of technology, tourists and scientists could find out the way to travel to far places,
such
 as
South pole
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the South Pole
the South pole
 for
remoting
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Remoting
removing
 natural
environment
. While the
first
 reactions to some people is to concur
such
 improvements, there are perspectives we can examine
this
 issue in depth.
First
 of all, natural
environment
 is our earth’s important asset, and
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 to
remote natural
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the remote natural environment
environment
 might could help us to find out ways to protect it.
Moreover
, we can have chances to figure out what problems we are facing.
Therefore
, having
such
 abilities to
remote natural
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the remote natural environment
environment
 is a great progress of environmental protection.
Furthermore
, it might
also
 help us to know how to control the situation of global warming.
However
, we don’t know if
such
 kind of
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 or observation has any influence for the natural
environment
.
In addition
, we don’t know if
such
traveling
the act of going from one place to another
travelling
 has potential
affects
property of a personal character that is portable but not used in business
effects
 to our
environment
. There are still many uncertainties even though now it’s possible for
professions
a person engaged in one of the learned professions
professionals
 to travel to
such
 far places to
remote natural
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the remote natural environment
environment
. To conclude, we live
in
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on
 the earth and the protection of the natural
environment
 is our primary mission to focus. Even though we have the abilities
for
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of
 human beings to travel to
South pole
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the South pole
, our natural
environment
 fragile. We need to be careful about every decision we make, we have the responsibility to protect the only one earth we have.
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