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There is growing evidence that man-made activities are making global temperatures higher. What might be the man-made causes of temperatures rising? How should we deal with this problem?

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Climate change, a major threat to life on Earth, is caused mainly by our imprudent actions. The
temperature
 rise,
in particular
, is a troubling issue that has been preoccupying many across the globe.
This
 essay will discuss some of the ruthless actions of men, which contribute to the global warming and put forward several solutions to overcome the same. Global warming is primarily a problem of too much carbon dioxide (CO2) in the atmosphere resulting in the greenhouse effect.
This
 carbon overload, in turn, is caused mainly by burning of fossil fuels which are used to generate electricity, and as fuel for our vehicles.
Furthermore
, tropical deforestation,
also
 by human hands, is another major contributor to global warming. When these forests are burned illegally for deforestation, immense amount of carbon is
further
 released into the atmosphere which cannot be absorbed by the trees as the forests are gone.
Nevertheless
, there are various measures that both governments and individuals could take to prevent or at least mitigate, global warming. As individuals, we should try to limit our contribution to the surging global
temperature
 by becoming more
energy
 efficient. We should use zero-carbon footprint transportations
such
 cycle more often
besides
 commuting by public transportations whenever possible. The government,
on the other hand
, should phase out fossil fuel dependency and rev up on renewable
energy
 as the source of
energy
.
Therefore
, renewable resources
such
 as sunlight and wind should be harnessed to provide 'clean
energy
'. Scotland,
for example
, generated a whopping 98% of
this
 year
energy
 requirement using wind turbines and aims to be 100% fossil-fuel free by 2020. In conclusion, higher world
temperature
 is mainly due to our greedy act of extreme deforestation and fossil fuel consumption.
Nonetheless
, the consequence of raising global
temperature
 should be delayed, halted or even reversed, by switching over to renewable
energy
 sources and being
energy
-efficient at individual-level, before time runs out.
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