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Living in a town or city is better than living in the countryside.

#town #city #countryside
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It is argued that a
life
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 in a town or
city
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 is more desirable than that in the
countryside
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.
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, many people disagree with
this
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 point. Should we live in a town or should we stay in the
countryside
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?
This
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 paragraph may satisfy you. It is undeniable that living in a
city
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 provides people with a lot of benefits. The most important point is that many people prefer to live in
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city
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the city
a city
cities
 because of the convenience.
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City
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The city
 is the most crowded and prosperous place with a variety/host of famous restaurants, hotels, supermarkets, universities, hospitals, office buildings, etc. People can easily find the most modern, advanced, and comfortable items surrounding.
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, parents believe that living in a
city
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 will be better for their children because they can approach various products of human civilization at the soonest. They grow and develop in a modern society.
Furthermore
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, many people choose to live in the
city
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 with a view to adopting a busy and modern lifestyle Bars, clubs, movie
theaters
a building where theatrical performances or motion-picture shows can be presented
theatres
, shopping
centers
an area that is approximately central within some larger region
centres
, beauty salons, idols’ fan meetings,
etc
continuing in the same way
etc.
 definitely bring people joy and relaxation
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 aiding in balancing their
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life
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lives
. . Unfortunately, the more modern
life
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 in the
city
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 is, the more burden and stress the people get. Many people believe that without tremendous efforts, earning a living will appear so tough. Money does not grow on trees. With
the high
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the highest
higher
 living standard in the
city
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, people need to make double or even triple efforts to earn money to spend on different living expenses, thereby resulting in people experiencing a lot of stress. Meanwhile,
life
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 in the
countryside
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 would be much easier since the living standard is lower and almost all foods are obtained from farms. People do not need to work so hard to earn the living or compete against each other.
In addition
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, it is undeniable that
life
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 in the
countryside
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 is safer and healthier. On the one hand, population in the
countryside
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 is not so crowded,
therefore
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, there are fewer conflicts, occupational and traffic accidents
.
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.
Besides
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, it is a fact that social issues
such
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 as theft, gambling, drug & alcohol addiction, prostitution, murder and child abuse often occur in the
city
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…
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On the other hand
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, while people living in the
city
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 face many disasters and hazards
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 as noise, air or water pollution, dirty foods and food
posioning
the physiological state produced by a poison or other toxic substance
poisoning
 every day, people in the
countryside
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 can enjoy a peaceful
life
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 with food self-sufficiency. In conclusion, no matter where you live, how you live is more important. Living in the
city
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 or
countryside
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 has its own advantages and disadvantages and people have their own thought and choice.
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