Some people think sending criminals to prison is not an effective way to deal with them. Education and training are better. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

Some said that it is not a good solution to put offenders
into
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in
jails.
Instead
, providing educational and training programs
are
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is
likely to bring more benefits.
Although
there are reasonable arguments about
causes
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the causes
of an imprisonment, I am in favour of the idea of educating and training criminals. There is a convincing reason why opponents believe that offenders should be sent to
prisons
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prison
.
This
is because they committed serious
crimes including
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crimes, including
drug trafficking, robbery or murder, posing many threats on citizens and society. Putting them into
jails not
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jails, not
only keeps them away potential
victims but
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victims, but
also
prevents them from constantly threatening others. Taking my local area as an example, people avoided coming home or going out late some years ago due to being afraid of robbers and social problems that can happen to them any time.
However
, after many criminals were put into prisons by the strong campaign of the authority, the local people have had a better sense of safety when they come back home at night.
However
, I am of the opinion that the advantages of providing educational programs and vocational training are much greater. The
first
benefit is that people offending crimes are aware of the moral values in society when they are well-educated by the government, allowing them understanding their past mistakes.
As a result
of
this
, they could repay for society by talking to teenage people to deter them from making serious errors in their lives.
In addition
, supporting criminals by suffering career training
such
as plumbing,
mechanics
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mechanical
or mining creates a
favorable
encouraging or approving or pleasing
favourable
chance of landing a job to earn a living, leading to the decrease in the crime rate in the future. In conclusion, I strongly support the notion that having access to a job training and an effective education is more
of
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about
the importance for criminals.
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A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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